Learning the Ropes - N.C.U. - Editing Banter (Patreon)

Story: Allow yourself to just drift away with the smoke, and follow the flame now, Laura…” 

SG: what does it say for me that i basically started picturing a flame and zoned out as soon as i started reading this paragraph? :oP

Me: The world may never know =cP

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Story: Her eyes were reflecting the glow of the candle. Two tiny little flames, one in each eye, showing exactly what was on her mind…what was hypnotizing her. The thought gave Rayne a shiver. 

SG: Seconding the shiver. That was a nice little description

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Story: “Going deeper, and deeper. Feeling your eyes getting so heavy. Just let go now Laura, let go and…Sleep.”

SG: dammit...it got me. I guess you know you're doing a good job if the induction puts your editor out

ME: It's kind of the litmus test for these things =cP

SG: is it actually an accurate litmus test, though, considering i drop for just about everything?

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Story: Laura leaned in and whispered seductively into Rayne’s ear, “Thats a girl, just let that side of you, the side that wants to hypnotize people into being your pets, let that side run free. Let it run wild. Allow yourself to envision all the fun you could have with people, even those in the sorority, even me, if we were only your hypnotized pets.”  As she finished she gently licked Rayne’s ear. The redhead shivered in response. 

SG: Aaaaand that's how Rayne creates a harem, isn't it? :oP

Me: it's already in her head from previous trances just reinforcing it for people who don't apy that close of attention.

SG: i'm assuming you mean the previous trances with trisha, which is kind of what i figured. still a good idea to reinforce that, though

Me: Yup :P

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Story: What would it be like if you were to feel feathers, gently tickling the bottom of your feet? 

SG: Damn it...(read as: yes i felt that, briefly)

Me: Yup

SG: litmus test = success