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Spring of the first year of Ranger Academy.

Well, technically, the year rolled over on the winter solstice, so it was more like the second year, but, well, either way, nine months after the Academy started.

The lesson plan I’d been given was - more or less - daily. Occasionally, Sky would be substituted by another Instructor as he went off on some mission, or Bluebeard – Hunting – would be gone for weeks at a time as he handled some problem.

Other times, like today, we were on a field trip, designed to give us practical experience in real situations. Goblin encampments were the favorite, the creatures seemingly inexhaustible. Usually quite a bit bigger than the 11 I’d be asked to tackle, which made me wonder if Arthur had whittled them down to size before sending me in. Wilderness survival trips were a close second, and arena fights against monsters third.

I went over my armor again, making subtle adjustments to it. This wasn’t Maximus’s beauty that he’d carefully crafted for me, no. That was somewhere in the Ranger’s armory, but it was off-limits to me. Something about ‘learning how to use standard armor’ and ‘it won’t always be a skin-tight fit.’

Bah humbug.

I stumbled and nearly fell as a particularly large wave rocked the frigate we were on, chuckles coming from the rest of the team. I flipped them off good-naturedly – they all had Sailing as a lesson, and had solid sea legs.

I checked the last few clasps on my vambraces – they were tight, and my armor was on me securely. The only concession to non-standard armor I had was a large quantity of Arcanite woven into the laminar vest I was wearing, with the idea being that I’d only pull the mana in case of emergency, to save someone else. It’d be a fail if I pulled it for non-critical reasons, but I had a bunch of leeway.

I looked around at the team – my team – as we headed away from the island where Ranger Academy was, back to the capital.

Wolfy, with MoonMoon.

Oozy, with his explosive arrows. We weren’t going near him, or to be accurate, we weren’t going near his quiver, even MoonMoon was staying far away. He wasn’t offended – he just laughed, pleased that we considered him dangerous enough to avoid.

Barrier was around, pacing nervously. He’d gotten better, both with his barrier usage, and with flying. Still didn’t have a flying skill though, although he seemed to think he was close.

It felt like someone had acquired a cloning vat, or was some sort of [Master Cloning Biologist] or something, and pumped out dozens of the Artillery Mages. I knew it was because there was standard training for all of them, and for the most part they took all the same skills, but it was still unnerving, only being able to tell them apart by their scars and subtle differences in their hair color.

We had Artillery C with us, as I’d mentally – and verbally – dubbed him.

Levitator was with us, and to his displeasure, he was starting to become more and more like a mage that threw things every day, instead of a clever duelist who used weapons from afar.

The first step had been the Instructors convincing him that his weapons didn’t need handles – after all, he was using Wind to guide them, he didn’t need to hold them.

Then it was that spear tips were more efficient than swords.

Then it was that using more tips, faster, was better than slowly whittling someone down.

Before Levitator had realized it, he was basically an inefficient Metal mage. He still stubbornly clung onto two shields and two swords – one for his actual hands, one for his skill-hand-thing – under the logic that he’d never run out of stuff that way.

Still, we shared a secret smile as he muttered and cursed about it.

We had Lava, who after many nights talking with Night, the Sentinel filling in all sorts of gaps in my knowledge and education, that along with his element, I figured he had some type of restriction skill. He always – no matter the situation – started off a fight slow, then after a few minutes, erupted into violent motion, overpowering whoever he was against. It was a coinflip if he’d win a three-vs-one if he managed to get to that point.

I hadn’t pushed for specifics, and he wasn’t forthcoming with them. It wasn’t critical for this mission, although if it ever was, I’d ask.

Hector was along, one of the Three Musketeers. Hey, I was biased. I liked guards – even former guards – and I’d taken the time and effort to learn his name. He had the standard set of armor and weapons every Ranger had, but kept his trusty baton, which he’d reach for first.

“Too many skills relating to it.” He’d confided in me at one point.

We had one of the nameless front-line soldiers rounding out the team. They were fairly interchangeable, none nearly as charming as Kallisto.

Instructor Jason was with us, providing a guiding hand, since he knew the who, what, where, when, how, and why. It was his job to get us to the right place, and open the right doors – namely, the Colosseum today.

“Hey Wolfy, what have you learned about today’s mission?” I asked him.

“For the thousandth time, I have a name, you know.” He said, shooting me a look.

MoonMoon both gave off a strange, barking laugh, as the white one nuzzled me, and the black on nuzzled Wolfy, clearly approving.

“Yup! Wolfy!” I cheerfully told him.

“Be glad you have a name.” Artillery Mage C said. “I’m just ‘C’.”

Artillery Mage C!” I said, with a note of mischief in my voice.

He rolled his eyes.

“You see what I mean.”

Hector looked smug.

“Well, some people have a proper appreciation for the guard.”

Levitator smacked him with the side of his floating blade.

“What I don’t get is why there are nine of us.” Soldier said. “Squads are always eight people. Nine is just wrong. It’s unnatural.”

He… had a point.

Wolfy laughed.

“You haven’t noticed that Elaine’s always in a team of nine?”

“I think it’s because they want people to get used to fighting in a ‘full squad’, not with a healer at the ready.” I said.

“That makes no sense.” Oozy said. “Whatever team you’re in will be eight people, and it’s not like teams don’t have utility or support that they need to protect, and the support fights as well. Hell, you throw some mean flames around, there’s no reason the healer designation should grant you an exception.”

“We’re almost there.” Instructor Jason said.

The ship landed at the dock, sailors and dockhands expertly performing their dance.

We jumped off before everything was ready, not even getting a batted eye from the dockhands. It wasn’t every day a squad of heavily armed soldiers – or in our case, Ranger Trainees – landed, but it happened frequently enough that nobody blinked when it happened.

A quick jog through the streets, people parting for us like Moses and the Red Sea – the perks of being in full combat gear – and we were at one of the “challenger” gates to the Colosseum, instead of the “audience” gates.

Instructor Jason had a quick word with the guard.

“Right, you’re all set. Reminder, Ranger Elaine is in charge.” He said.

“Why?” Lava said. We looked at him, shocked at the audacity.

“Rank.” Instructor Jason said curtly. “Are you seriously going to argue this now? Questioning command right before a mission, a fight?”

Lava muttered something, but shook his head.

“Go get ‘em.”

We jogged through the twisting hallways in formation. There’d been an… incident… the first time I’d come here, where I healed most of the gladiators I’d bumped into. Which had caused a ripple effect of pissed and happy people, and, well, the less said about That Incident the better. Ever since then, our route had been clear every time I’d gone through.

We made it to the gates, a pair of air-lock like gates, such that when they opened, nothing from the arena could escape.

“Wolfy. Got anything about today’s mission?” I asked him again, now that we finally had a moment. He was good at sniffing out information he had no right to have, to the tacit approval of the Instructors. Now, if he ever got caught somewhere he shouldn’t be, that’d be a different story.

“No large rebellions caught, no army squads arrested and sentenced, and no famous criminals.” He quickly recited. “A few adventurer teams have returned in the past few weeks, including two famous hunter groups. They don’t send gladiators against Trainees – bad for everyone, there must always be a designated winner. My bet is we’re fighting monsters.”

“Barrier, maze?”

He shrugged.

“Funnel probably”

I nodded.

“Do that. Soldier, Lava, Hector – you’re our frontline. Levitator, Wolfy – you’re protecting Artillery C and Oozy. Barrier, I want your back to the wall so you can focus on funneling, and throw up any shields as needed. I’m going to be next to you, and I have shit secondary barriers, and jump in as needed to heal. There are no moons, so I’m touch-only. Wolfy, I leave MoonMoon to you – you know what to do with them better than me, and I can’t heal them nearly as well. Keep them alive, I can’t do much for animals. Understood?”

“Sir, yes sir!” They said, saluting me.

It gave me a little thrill that ran through my body at that.

We paused a moment, and seeing his moment, C spoke up.

“It’s Artillery Mage C, thank you very much.”

We laughed at that, as the heavy metal grate was lifted up. We walked out, to the roar of the crowd, an [Announcer]with a Sound-class doing his thing.

“Froooooooooom the North Gate! Future protectors and guardians of Remus! We give you - A Ranger Trainee Team!”

We got a moderate, but not thunderous applause from the crowd. We weren’t Rangers, and quite frankly, we were C-list entertainment. A warm-up for whatever today’s main event was. A full Ranger squad might be B-list, while the best [Gladiator]s were A-list.

Or a Sentinel. Brawling was a fan of showing up when he was bored, and regularly threw wrecking balls through the schedule. Given his fame and popularity, the organizers were happy to accommodate him.

I just hoped he wouldn’t be our opponent today. That would suck. We’d get the shit beaten out of us for as long as it was funny. The rumor mill had it, eight problematic Trainees were put in a squad once, and Brawling had given them all an extensive ‘lesson’ in front of the crowd. We didn’t think we’d all screwed up that badly, but hey, the Instructors worked in mysterious ways sometimes.

We quickly got into formation, Barrier snapping up tall panes of Brilliance around us, leaving a small entrance to funnel whatever monster was coming at us to the frontline, keeping whatever was coming from the more fragile – and deadly – backline.

“Froooooooooooom the South Gate! The most vicious dinosaur living in Pallos! With teeth the size of swords, a tail that can break bones, and a jaw that can shatter stone! Victor of seven fights, Albius, the Abelisaurus!”

We all cursed, in various interesting ways.

“I can’t hold that!” Barrier screamed in terror.

I punched his arm, not being tall enough to cuff him properly.

“Then don’t! Barrier down, everyone scatter, hit-and-run! Sacrifice a limb if needed to stay alive, I’m here, I can save almost anything!”

The barrier went down, and we scattered, as Albius charged into the arena, coated in vines squirming all along its body.

“Caster Monster!” We called out.

Every living being had a Class, and an Element. Some dinosaurs were locked to one, or a derivative – most fliers were Wind or Wind-adjacent, for example.

Usually, it just reflected what type of skills they’d have – for example, fliers had flying-related skills, weight and endurance and speed.

Rarely, like MoonMoon, like Albius, the monster would get skills that would physically manifest, or that they could cast. In this case, this seemed to be Wood-aligned, with vines snaking along its body. We didn’t know what they could do yet, but it couldn’t be anything good.

Not with seven wins under its belt.

“Who was supposed to lose this one!?” Soldier screamed out as we scattered.

Light Moon ran to the middle of the area, barking fiercely at Albius, while Dark Moon slunk into the shadows cast by the walls and the sun, moving to flank. Light Moon started to flash bright light at Albius’s eyes, aiming to blind and disorient him. I briefly considered trying to blind with [Veil], but ditched the idea – he was moving too fast, and having [Veil] shatter was a good way to blow through mana.

C took a few exploratory shots, only for the thick vines to absorb the hits.

“I need an opening!” He yelled.

“Conserve and save until then!” I yelled back.

Right, C was set.

Oozy fired an arrow, deadly black mist exploding over Albius’s face. The dinosaur just roared, fear striking my heart, and continued charging with no regard for what happened.

Our three frontliners scattered, splitting apart, stabbing from the flanks, cutting into the vines. Lava’s head snapped back as one of the vines “punched” him back.

Dark Moon appeared, swiping at the leg, Darkness punching through the vines, a light scoring appearing on the leg.

I hesitated. Just a moment, as I thought and processed what was going on.

Fine. Today was our lucky day, and I seemed to be a perfect counter to the wrecking machine pitted against us.

[Rapidash] twice to get me to the side of Albius, then I unleashed everything I had, going for a “wide” application of fire, trying to set as many vines as I could on fire, to burn away his defenses.

I was too close. It was too risky.

A sickening crunch and crackwent through my body, and I found myself hitting one of Barrier’s panes of Brilliance, my arms and legs not responding to my commands as I slumped down to the floor of the Arena like a sack of potatoes.

The announcer roared something, and the crowd was going wild. I couldn’t hear them, nor could I see, as my helmet was twisted around, blocking my vision, a distant ringing in my ears as I started to pulse [Phases of the Moon] through me, not even bothering to do a full diagnostic first.

The heal would be horribly inefficient, but given that I think I’d broken my neck, I wasn’t going to complain too much. Living was a priority right now, and it wasn’t a sure thing.

Feeling my body restitch itself, a sudden, well, enlightenment as I could feel my arms and legs again, the disconcerting sensation as the bones forced themselves into alignment, causing my body to flop around as they pushed against the ground to make it work.

I felt the healing stop, my body finished repairing, my helmet still over my face. I experimentally twitched a limb or two, only to feel myself get picked up and flung.

Fuck this.

With a small burst of flames, I burned away the leather strap holding my helmet on, letting it fly off while I was still in the air. I got a glimpse of Albius’s foot having landed right where I had just been, Lava saving my life by throwing me out of the way, risking his own in the process.

Burnt and smoldering vines covered Albius, where previously they had formed an impenetrable armor. Deep gouges scored its side, and blades danced around it.

This wasn’t going well. I got up, and started calling out orders.

“Levitator! Oozy! Aim for the eyes! Blind it! Kill its sense of smell! Barrier, shield! Everyone who can, hit the right leg!” I called out, seeing that trying to directly kill the dinosaur wasn’t working.

A focused effort on the leg finally bore fruit, as after a few blows, we cut a tendon, and the leg was dragging, the dinosaur no longer charging around. A spurt of blood came from the dinosaur’s face.

“Everyone back!” I called out.

We regrouped on the other side of the area from the enraged, crippled dinosaur. I put hands on each teammate as they made it over, making sure they were full healed. I checked my mana.

About 4,000 left. Screw this, I’d take a fail if it came to it.

I breathed in, feeling the mana from the Arcanite in my armor flowing into me.

“Right, it’s currently crippled and enraged. The crowd’s going to hate us for this, but they’re not the ones down here. Oozy, Levitator, Artillery C, you’re going to hit it from a distance until it’s dead. I blew through most of my mana, and I’m running on the emergency reserves. I’d got a bit if needed, but let’s not trigger a fail.”

“I’m just going to move in, stab it with my spear.” Lava said.

“No. Stay back, it’s not worth it.”

He sneered at me.

“I listened to you at first, but if you think you can steal the kill just because you’re sleeping with the Sentinels, you have ano-“

“Stand down.” Soldier barked at him. “Ranger Elaine is in charge, and regardless of how little you like it, her orders are law.”

I gave him a level look, fighting down frustration and anger that was bubbling up.

He did just save my life, risking his own in the process, and was only bringing this up now, when we were relatively safe. It didn’t excuse it, but it was… mitigating.

“If you believe you’ve been unfairly robbed, bring it up with Senior Drill Instructor Quintis. That dinosaur is capable of performing lethal blows that I can not save you from. My primary goal is to keep everyone alive. My secondary goal is a success on the mission.”

Argh. I wish I had more to say, more elegant words. Words that would flow like honey, convince and persuade people to my way of thinking, so they could just understand.

Whatever. I’d settle for obedience for now.

I stoically turned my back on our frontline, now our backline, as C, Oozy, and Levitator performed their bloody work. I tuned out the boos from the crowd.

Wolfy tapped my shoulder.

“They want you to call it off, let the dinosaur live another day.”

I glanced at him. I glanced at Lava. This would mollify his complaint, and he was the best man for the job.

“Lava. One spear, thrown through the head. Try to finish it fast before they stop us.”

A mad grin came over his face, and throwing his spear like a javelin, impaled Albius through the head. It worked due to him explosively erupting, like his element and nickname implied, and the rest of them having worked through the dinosaur somewhat. Lava was just the final blow.

A dismayed cry came up from the crowd, and some old produce was thrown our way. I didn’t care, [Veil]deflecting some, Barrier getting the rest with his shields.

[*Ding!* Your Party has slain an [Abelisaurus] (Wood, lv 333)]

We beat a hasty retreat out the North gate, the crowd clearly in no mood to be celebratory with us.

“Thoughts?” I asked, as we navigated our way out of the arena.

“It was a setup, a test, or a mistake.” Hector immediately replied. “That was far higher level, and more difficult, than it should be, and we ran a strong risk of dying. Additionally, that dinosaur was clearly a favorite. We don’t get fed the favorites to kill and level off of.”

He paused a moment, thinking.

“Does anyone here have some political connections they haven’t mentioned? Anyone a Senator’s kid or something? General’s son?”

We shook our heads. He shrugged.

“Probably a mistake then.”

We got back on the boat to the island, and I decided to check my level up notifications.

[*Ding!* Congratulations! [Constellation of the Healer] has leveled up to level 198! +10 Free Stats, +15 Mana, +15 Mana Regen, +15 Magic power, +15 Magic Control from your Class! +1 Free Stat for being Human! +1 Mana, +1 Mana Regen from your Element!]

[*Ding!* Congratulations! [Pyromancer] has leveled up to level 99! +5 Free Stats, +14 Mana, +8 Mana Regen, +14 Magic power, +8 Magic Control from your Class! +1 Free Stat for being Human! +1 Strength from your Element!]

[*Ding!* Congratulations! [Pyromancer] has leveled up to level 100! +5 Free Stats, +14 Mana, +8 Mana Regen, +14 Magic power, +8 Magic Control from your Class! +1 Free Stat for being Human! +1 Strength from your Element!]

[*Ding!*Congratulations! [Celestial Affinity] has reached level 198!]

[*Ding!*Congratulations! [Center of the Galaxy] has reached level 198!]

[*Ding!*Congratulations! [Phases of the Moon] has reached level 198!]

[*Ding!*Congratulations! [Veil of the Aurora] has reached level 198!]

[*Ding!*Congratulations! [Training] has reached level 151!]

[*Ding!*Congratulations! [Learning] has reached level 198!]

[*Ding!* For reaching level 100, you’ve unlocked the Class Skill [Fireball]!]

I pumped my arms, immediately replacing that skill with [Fireball].

When Night had found out I’d unlocked [Dragon’s Breath] at level 80 – which I told him via pantomime, the most amusing way of communicating a new skill – he’d hissed at me, and forbade me from ever using the skill. “The risk is not worth the rewards. If you decide to persist, to use the skill, I will slay you where you stand.” He said, and I’d sadly watched my level 80 skill stay at level 1 forever.

I suppose I unlocked it by constantly breathing out flames, one part a memory from how well it worked against the goblins, three parts from seeing how successful Spitter was spraying acid out of his mouth in duels, and simply imagining dragons breathing fire.

But now – now it was all worth it. Every insult, all the pain, almost dying today.

I had [Fireball].

With a whoop of glee, I ran to the back of the boat, and started firing off as many [Fireballs]as I could into the Nostrum Sea.

[Fireball]!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Name: Elaine]

[Race: Human]

[Age: 16]

[Mana: 14852/24400]

[Mana Regen: 25604]

Stats

[Free Stats: 360]

[Strength: 156]

[Dexterity: 213]

[Vitality: 297]

[Speed: 220]

[Mana: 2440]

[Mana Regeneration: 2903]

[Magic Power: 2148]

[Magic Control: 2475]

[Class 1: [Constellation of the Healer -   Celestial: Lv 198]]

[Celestial Affinity: 198]

[Warmth of the Sun: 170]

[Medicine: 188]

[Center of the Galaxy: 198]

[Phases of the Moon: 198]

[Moonlight: 160]

[Veil of the Aurora: 198]

[Vastness of the Stars: 138]

[Class 2: [Pyromancer - Fire: Lv 100]]

[Fire Affinity: 100]

[Fire Resistance: 100]

[Fire Conjuration: 100]

[Fire Manipulation: 100]

[Fuel for the Fire: 100]

[Burn Brightly: 100]

[Rapidash: 100]

[Fireball: 1]

[Class 3: Locked]

General Skills

[Identify: 130]

[Recollection of a Distant Life: 144]

[Pretty: 128]

[Vigilant: 185]

[Oath of Elaine to Lyra: 195]

[Ranger's Lore: 166]

[Training: 150]

[Learning:   198]

Comments

Malthe Mørk Mejlby

Maybe I missed something but I don't get Night's reaction to Elaine getting [Dragon's Breath]?

SelkieMyth

Julius flipped out when Elaine said the word "Dragon". Night's flipping out because Elaine might use a skill with the word "Dragon" in it. Like... he's pretty sure it'll be fine, but he's on a "let's not risk it" boat.

Enkelados

I gad hoped to learn more about nights dancing lessons. For the fight I would guess someone didn't like a girl in charge.

SelkieMyth

Night taught Elaine how to dance. He now teaches a wide variety of other skills, AKA comprehensive education touching all sorts of other topics her other classes don't hit. AKA if I need to pull out "Elaine has some very basic carpentry skills" in the future, I can claim it was a Nigh lesson. I don't want or plan on making her a Mary Sue, but now I have an excuse when I need X.

Ryan Naquin

An explanation why dragon's breath is bad would be nice. Night saying he will kill her if she uses it is a lot more extreme than a vague fear of dragons.

SelkieMyth

Potential spoiler alert: I *hope* to get to dragons this book, potentially as the climax. So far, we've just had terrified humans.

Aldous Russell

Thanks! Patreon fubary: "[Announcer]with", "crackwent", "[Veil]deflecting", "[Fireballs]as" I think "11 I’d be asked" should be "been". I think "Ranger’s armory" should be "Rangers' armory". I think "one for his actual hands" might be better as "one each". I think "happened frequently... when it happened" might be better as "when it did". "I’d got a bit" should be "I've". Character sheet spacing: Constellation, Learning

wellwish3r

Am I missing something? Shouldn't Pyromancer have evolved at 64?

Timothy Alexander

So 64 for the second time isn't a big deal - next class upgrade is pyromancer at 128 presumably.

Kristaps Kramins

When did she get [Dragon’s Breath]? It was not mentioned in any other chapter, and why would it be a bad skill. Some explanation would be nice.

自由

She really has to learn to be more careful, she is no Ilea ^^ .

Obran

I still think shooting fire out of her feet and hands like Iron Man would have been a better way to fly.

crusaderstar

Time skips are hard to do, I liked how you showed relationships between the trainees developed! Was surprised at the skill levels though, e.g. ranger lore is only 166 when it was 160 after the hell months I think? That seems too low a gain.

Markus

It has dragon in its name. And no one wants to risk summoning a dragon by using it.

Todd Kloos

She has a lot of free points now though, if she spent most of them on vitality she would increase her durability (and decrease her odds of getting killed) significantly. She is going to need more vitality for rapidash very soon anyways.

SelkieMyth

During the timeskip. Short version - I needed a level 80 skill, but it also needed to be replaced by [Fireball]

Chris

Recall way back when, when she used the word dragon, she was hushed and told never to speak it, because if you speak the name they may come

BladeTytan

Not just hushed, they broke camp and fled from the location where she said it.

Kevin Caffrey

I didn’t really like how almost none of her team had names. They felt like extras that won’t matter in 2 chapters (which they probably are), but that makes me wonder what the purpose of the last two chapters are (as opposed to time skipping over the whole thing). You do at least address it in-story, but I imagine most people would have learned names after spending 9 months with them. Take the plague arc: she had her made up names for people, but learned their real names a day or two in. It’s been mentioned several times that the wider group was forged into one team by hell months, but that is very much at odds with never bothering to learn names.

Niko

i find it hilarious that Elaines "incidents" are the complete opposite of Artemis's. Artemis drops bodies and with Elaine the bodies don't drop.

SelkieMyth

The Plague arc was going to be a big one, and everyone was going to be a moving, breathing part of it, each with their role to play. These characters I made for options, then when push came to shove, a good number weren't used. I have a name problem right now, and I didn't want to blow a dozen names on one-shot characters :( Elaine might also "nickname" most people, because there are a LOT of people for her to learn the names of - over 100. Might be her "this is too many" limit. Heck, she never learned the names of the apprentices!

Razyr

It seems to me Elaine has the problem with names like I do it takes me a year of constantly saying and hearing someone’s name to remember unless you’re name is Wolf and have a pet wolf or something like joe , bob, or Pj something easy and used a lot

Håvard

The problem was probably more one of betting. You know that one of the fighters are hurt (she might even have fixed missing limbs), this changes the odds, so you make an bet then Elaine moves through and heal him. Now if you bet against him you are angry if you bet on him you are happy. If you are an bookie your are probably angry unless you made a lot of money.

IJustWannaRead

Probably a set up to kill Elaine for some either sexist or money reason. Glad they killed the thing. I don’t get why they think she’s sleeping with the instructors? I can almost certainly say she’s not (will be very disappointed if she actually is, tho it would be kinda funny)

SelkieMyth

She's 10,000% NOT. Sub-18. No romance pre-18. The arranged marriage thing//crush was the closest I was willing to go before Elaine was 18, and I've stayed away from it since then. Post 18? I might do romance.

IJustWannaRead

Just as long as the character earns it and it’s done well romance is good. If some guy or girl just shows up and boom Elaine suddenly thinks he’s oh so handsome and bam they having sex every night it feels really bad and can ruin a story. Especially if the first person she meets she instantly loves and spend forever together. It does happen, but the vast majority of people don’t marry their first crush. Furthmore of the ML completely overshadows the FL it can also ruin a story, tho that’s probably more of a Chinese web novel thing from what I’ve read. I bet you can do a good romance tho, you’ve juggled some hard things with this story and done well. I’m just really hoping if you do it it doesn’t flop, because it does in about 95-99 percent of the novels I’ve read. I was like 99 percent sure she wasn’t sleeping with them, in part because of age but also because of how they have acted toward her in the past (professionally).

SelkieMyth

I wish I had spoiler tags! How about this. I aim to show healthy relationships, and breakdown toxic relationships, and possibly show why toxic stuff is bad, and what makes a real, solid, healthy relationship, which many novels don't do well. The romance aspect I *might* fall on my face on - this is my first novel afterall - but if I punt the romance, and end up too trope or cliche, I think I'll nail the relationship part. How's that? Also, we already saw Elaine happily dump a crush for acting kinda shitty, but it's entirely possible that she goes "WHOA Hello there do you want to go on a date?" To someone, because that's not an unreasonable thing to do. (I might have met my wife via a similar method, and they say write what you know........)

IJustWannaRead

I thought you were married and that gives me confidence in how you will do it. I just really hope the story doesn’t turn into sappy romance story with cliche love lines and an OP male lead that saves Elaine all the time. I doubt it, you’re a good writer. But I (and prolly others, can’t really say), didn’t read the story to read a romance power couple. It can be a nice touch, but overdone or done in a wrong way can ruin a good novel. Also, considering her current status of running around the world, idk I don’t have kids, but that doesn’t seem like a good environment for children. Elaine is one of the rare female protagonists I could actually see having a baby (most of them give off the never want kids vibe). I mean ultimately it’s your decision, and romance can really help a story. However, the amount of amateur authors that brut their story under a bad romance is very greater than those that pull it off. Then again, it’s your first novel and you need experience. It’s just you’ve really drawn me in and I’m really hoping it doesn’t go to shit (IMO, I am a bit touchy on romance plots not only because of how they are usually done, but also other reason I don’t wanna touch on). It may just be a me thing in the end.

SelkieMyth

I will say, kids would throw a wrecking ball through the story in a way I wouldn't know how to recover from. Maybe - MAYBE - I'd write an "alterative universe" story where Elaine settles down and has kids, retires, and dies at the ripe old age of 300 surrounded by hundreds of great-great-great-great-grandchildren. But "Having kids" and "action-adventure" are almost entirely mutually exclusive. It won't be done.

IJustWannaRead

Oh thank god for that. Kids in most stories turn me off so bad due to some experiences I’ve had that I drop 99 percent of them. It’s not that I hate children, it’s just, they don’t fit, they are often forced, and 99 percent of the time they serve no purpose. Boyfriends, flings, potential husband I’d be fine with if done well, but kids...I probably would have dropped even if the story continued to be one of the best I’ve read online. It’s just one of those things in books that makes me close the cover. I’m pretty confident you’ll do a good job and not destroy your story, it’s just romance makes me apprehensive about what will come, and whether or not my sunk cost Is actually gonna turn out to be a waste of time (it does more often than not, I have several other things besides children that make me drop, it’s kinda stupid but I can’t help it). Good luck writing it, just remember (I think) most people came for Elaine, not her boyfriend. I’m pretty sure you can pull it off and be one of the few novels that does romance good.

Choboman

Don't think Lava's objection was necessarily sexist. She's 5 years younger and half as dangerous as anyone else on the team, but is arbitrarily made the leader. Many soldiers would resent a male in the same position.

SelkieMyth

His MAJOR SIN was bringing it up DURING A FIGHT. It's ok to resent it. It's ok to challenge her, or question it. It's not ok when you're mid-fight, even if the fight's stabilized.

Celsica

Think about it. Every year thousands of 22 y/o's graduate from West Point and other military academies around the world and are put in charge of platoons as officers. Male or female. A lot of their soldiers are hardened war vets. Every. single. military. makes it a point that age, sex, experience, etc... is not the deciding factor. Rank and orders are. If Elaine was put in a position of leadership for this exercise, you shut up and listen to her. If Elaine is a good leader, she'll make sure to listen to the opinions of her teammates during the planning phase of the operation, if there's one. This is shown in the earlier chapters with the Ranger team. In reality, after this exercise, some members might voice their displeasure to each other around some beers. This chapter is clearly establishing that Lava is a selfish prick and if the instructors are watching the match, he'll get a severe reprimand. Whether he was acting out because of elitism, classism, sexism... should be irrelevant to the instructors, but it might be relevant to the story of course. I'm looking forward to see where this is going. Lava has been placed as a pawn on the board; a potential future antagonist, or maybe someone who will get better in his ways and will come to like Elaine?

tibbish

Yeah thanks for the "no kids on adventure" pledge, like you said it'd trash the story

SelkieMyth

OH! Also no harem. 100% promise. (I was kinda tempted at the start of planning to do harem, because it's a lot of fun to write dozens of different love interests, but I forced myself to axe the idea because it's no fun/not very good. I did understand the temptation though)

IJustWannaRead

Thank goodness for that too. Harems are trashhhhh. Half the love interests get forgotten, the mc magically meets a million people fine with sharing the person they love and nobody rejects the harem. I can see the temptation because it gives the possibility of exploring different types of lovers all in one story, but ugh, they are sooooo bad. Sorry for rant harems just usually turn into poorly written fantasies.

tibbish

Yeah, don't need lewds or harem thanks! Solid action, growth, and exploration is what got me into this story anyways

IJustWannaRead

For this story I’m the same. I don’t mind lewd chapters, but reading about Elaine having sex I think would end up much more awkward than it would be attractive. Of course she doesn’t needa stay a virgin for all the hundreds or thousands of years of her life, but for this story I’d much prefer it as either a fade to black or just kind of off handedly mentioned. If a lewd does occurs, I’d probably simply skip it.

Exandra

If I were you (and a relationship is a required), I’d ship Artemis and Elaine. They’ve already been living and bickering together (like old married couples). Also it’d provide character evolvement and it’d be plausible. (Artemis known “The Life”, Elaine’s hero complex feelings evolve after a tour without Artemis, etc.). And there’re opportunities for a lot of comedic scenes. (Uhuh, hair trigger Artemis getting jealous? :) )

Celsica

I would be absolutely livid if this happened. Mentor / trainee relationships are borderline grooming and would be completely out of character for Elaine. What do you think would be her father's reaction learning that his old friend has been using her authority to charm his daughter...

ChrisW

Spam F5 waiting for next chapter!

SelkieMyth

Ehhhh... Artemis is a pretty maternal figure to Elaine//the cool aunt. It'd be pretty gross on so many levels for them to get together. Flip it a moment to Julius. "Middle-age man travels with young vulnerable teen and they start dating once she's 18" Add in that Artemis is literally her parents age, and knew her since she was 8. noooooooooooooooo.

Exandra

I’m amused that an ex mentor-trainee relationship is gross, but marrying a 14 year old is socially acceptable or even required in your world :)

SelkieMyth

Honestly I think two 14 year olds getting together is better than an 18 and 35 year old, especially when they knew each other at 8 and 25. A large portion of things as well came from Elaine not accepting that this is how things are and doing something about it - I don’t write this society like it’s something good

Milandaanza

Sad times dragons breath sounds amazing since dragons are the apex predators. It probably would have unlocked a dragon related class too T_T

Milandaanza

This.... is a very good point. Especially with Elaine having a fuller schedule then normal.

Milandaanza

Artemis is too much the awesome older sister figure for an actual relationship. Had Elaine not traveled with her for two years I’d be more open to it. That said; especially if Elaine likes girls, Artemis absolutely has a ‘first crush’ vibe (or maybe second after Lyra). In a world of second class for women; Artemis stands out and proud and takes no shit. Definitely someone to crush on for a budding gay. As for Harem.... a lot of people forget you can do similar without Harem ala a close group of friends. No romance per say but nights curled up against each other for comfort, spending the day together, etc are a thing. So rather then harem maybe consider giving Elaine an ‘inner circle’ that is family to her.

Milandaanza

Sexist or not they are in a military group. Lava and everyone else is a ‘Ranger trainee.’ Elaine is a ‘Ranger’. This boils down to him complaining about rank at a bad time and he’s going to get wrecked for it imo. Personally I think he brought it up due to Elaines running up to an arena challenge and throwing fire at close range.

Milandaanza

I did not like Elaine running up to the dinosaur to throw fire. It seemed dumb with LAVA on the group. She literally only had to wait while he built up to it. I’m glad she unlocked fireball but I’m amazing they haven’t beaten some survival instincts into the girl with subpar physical stats running at the dinosaur (which she didn’t identify) for speeds sake. ....Also sad she didn’t get to keep and work up her dragons breath. I feel like she just tossed something with amazing potential.